Our Friday Fictioneers Mistress Rochelle has conjured up an inspirational prompt photo of her own, which sent my muse back to the beginning of it all. My story follows Rochelle’s picture.
Genre: Travel Fiction
Title: You Again?
Word Count: 100
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I saw the snake, backed away, and warned Sarff.
“Is it poisonous?” she asked.
“I don’t know.”
A feminine voice said, “I’m not poisonous.”
Sarff said, “A talking snake. How cool. What’s your name?”
“I’m Petra. You’ll be okay. Just watch your step.”
I said, “Snakes can’t talk. It’s a trick.”
“You’re such a skeptic, Ormr. Read the Bible,” said Sarff.
Petra said, “The pomegranates at the top of the hill are yummy this time of year.”
As we climbed up. Sarff said, “Thanks. I love pomegranates.”
I said, “It’s forbidden to eat the fruit here.” They laughed at me.
Look both ways when reading fact or fiction.
Mind the gaps for hidden serpents.
Our Literary Journey 
I mean it’s quite simple, never trust a snake, talking or not. Never learn….
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🙂 I wonder how the snake feels.
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Dear Bill,
Interesting names. I wonder how it would be to just bite into a pomegranate? And nowhere does the Bible state it was an apple. Not sure where that came from. I agree with Iain…never trust a snake. Some lessons are tougher than others, aren’t they? Good one, sir.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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“I wonder how it would be to just bite into a pomegranate?”
I bitten a pomegranate. I’m guessing one could compare it to biting a softball. 😀 you don’ t get far
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Right. Even cutting one up is a lot of work to me. 🙂
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Thanks, Rochelle.
I think both names mean snake in the original language. The metaphor of forbidden fruit. Could be anything. 🙂
Thank you, Mistress.
Peace,
Bill
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Thats a fun one, well done.
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Thank you, Mason.
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You’re welcome.
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I always thought that planting of fruit and forbidding the eating of it was sneaky
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And of course, we all want only the forbidden one. LOL
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Funnily enough, my story last week focussed on a forbidden fruit, although from a different angle. I like how you make this story feel timeless. And why not a pomegranate?
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Thanks, Jen.
Your story may have been floating around in my mind. Two weeks ago I opened my first pomegranate and (like Rochelle said), Genesis does not identify what the forbidden fruit was. So, it just came to me that way. I’m also working on another unrelated story involving a talking snake. 🙂
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Crafty wordsmithing, Bill.
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Careful or they might get kicked out of the place…
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Could be, especially if they become aware of being aware. 🙂
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true
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I have me a feeling that they’d do well to not eat nothing from them trees …
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🙂 Maybe so. But do they?
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I have me a feeling they will heed no warning …
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Your story made me smile, Bill. And wince, as I remembered the consequences of that first act – the guns, the selfishness, the lust for power…
It’s a beautifully crafted little piece you’ve given us.
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Thank you so much, Penny. 🙂
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Clever take on the prompt. Loved it.
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Thanks, Sadra.
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Do snakes speak with a lisp? Nice one Bill.
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Maybe a bit of a hiss. Thanks, Keith.
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Those are some really cool names, Bill.
Snakes and serpents … mmm … me thinks they are always bad even
when in the special garden. This was a very enjoyable read. I liked it very much.
Isadora 😎
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Thank you, Isadora. Glad you liked it.
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Every snake who’s ever talked to me jas had bad intentions. It’s never been in English, but they’ve made their intention clear.
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🙂
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Every snake who’s ever talked to me has had bad intentions. It’s never been in English, but they’ve made their intention clear.
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i guess one rule to follow is don’t pick and eat without permission. anyway, i think you’d find my own story interesting as well: http://wp.me/p6FwZ-344
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The old human condition plot. 🙂
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Yikes, it’s happening again! Don’t eat the pomegranate!
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🤔
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It is good to know that the snake in the garden of Eden has survived. A reminder of how easily we are all fooled and fail to understand the reason for our own ruined downfall.
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They want it – they’re going to have it. Nobody’s going to tell them what they can or can’t do. Your characters’ voices and actions ring true. Very good.
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Thanks, Margret. 🙂
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Aha, methinks that snake is up to something!
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🙂
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But pomegranates are sooooo good! Course, I wouldn’t dream of biting into it. That’s gross. Open it and eat those little pearls that pop… Mmmm
Oh hell. Guess I’m in trouble for not listening.
Wonderfully done, as per!
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Thank you, Dale. I am kind of new to the pomegranate fan club, but they’re way mo’ betta’ than any apple. I’m sure Eve and Adam would agree. 🙂
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So good! Those little jewels when they pop in your mouth… Mmmmmm way more sensuous than an old apple 😉
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🙂
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Thank you. 🙂
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