Today’s Napo assignment was for me to find a short(ish) poem I like and to rewrite each line. I was to replace as many words as possible with words of opposite meaning (antonyms, perhaps). Then, polish and publish. Done! Right? (Sure.)
Since I’m caught up, I’ve made this Monday’s Rune (likewise the next three Mondays), so only one post per day for the remainder of April (except Saturdays, maybe, I hope). I may try to add other touches, like voiceover or videos, but I prefer my blog page relatively clean.
I chose two very short poems from Favorite Inspirational Poems (A Revell Inspirational Classic). My rewrites are italicized following the originals. I took the additional step of using a poetic theme opposite of the original poem. My voiceover is all four poems.
I Never Saw a Moor
by Emily Dickinson (1830-1886)
I never saw a Moor —
I never saw the Sea —
Yet know I how the Heather looks
And what a Billow be.
I never spoke with God
Nor visited in Heaven —
Yet certain am I of the spot
As if the Checks were given —
you always knew his name
by bill
you’ve seen many deserts
you’ve seen the wilderness
never will you know how sand feels
nor how the wood-gnomes dress.
we’ve spoken to dark angels
and had our time in Hell
then still we don’t know shit
clearly, I’ve lost my fucking will.
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The Steps of Faith
by – John Greenleaf Whittier
Nothing before, nothing behind, the steps of Faith.
Fall on the seeming void and find the Rock beneath.
Nothing before, nothing behind,
Fall on the void and find the Rock beneath.
Nothing before, nothing behind.
ambles of atheism
by bill
everything behind, everything before, the ambles of atheism.
rise from below in clarity and lose the slip above
everything behind, everything before
climb to the valid and forget the void above
everything behind, everything before.
***
Look both ways to see what the poet says.
Mind the gaps in both the literal and ironic.
It’s Monday.

Nicely done 😊
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Thank you, Kitty.
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A great result Bill, and wonderfully read!
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Thank you, Peter. When I have time, I hope to do the reads.
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I loved these, especially the first one!
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Thank you. I’m tickled that you liked it. 🙂
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These are very Bill-like responses. Me likey!
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Thank you, Dale.
They are, right?
Chuffed again. 🙂
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Absolutely!
Glad you are. 😊
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🙂
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😊
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Delightful !
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